有些留学生在完成essay写作时经常能想到好多论点 ， 但是总感觉这些论点只是机械的罗列 ， 彼此之间都是独立的 ， 并没有组成一个完整的段落 。 今天小编就为大家分享几个小方法 ， 让整个段落看起来是一个整体 ， 而不是一盘散沙 。
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今天主要分享的是内容连贯性的问题 。 下面是老师的打分标准：
高阶：logically organises information and ideas;there is clear progression throughout
中阶：presents information with some organisation but there may be a lack of overall progression
举个例子：
闲暇时间 ， 年轻人是否应该多在家跟家人在一起 ， 还是出去“浪”?
错误示范：
The young who spend more time at home could certainly strengthen the family relationship.It is likely that older family members can give them useful suggestions in their study and career development.The parents are more experienced in life.When the young stay with the family members,they will feel protected and will not feel lonely.
正确示范：
The young spending more time at home could bring numerous benefits,and the most obvious one is that the family relationship is certainly strengthened.It is doubtless that the longer the time people spend together,the more intimate they will become.Besides,older family members,who are more experienced in life,can give young people useful suggestions on their study and career development,such as how to cope with pressure from the employer and how to arrange time properly when task is too challenging.
上面的错误示范中 ， 成为散沙的主要原因有：
1.想写的东西太多
2.论点之间没有联系
3.句子之间无连接词
增加连贯性的方法
1.适当减一些论点
2.论证内容丰富一些
3.句子之间多使用连接词
1.减少论点数量
同学们在写很多论点的时候 ， 写到后面经常会跑偏 。 毕竟那些话题里最切题的论点就那几个 。 同学们后面列举的看似相关的内容 ， 有时候真的不太需要 。
所以 ， 同学们可以放弃多余的论点 ， 围绕几个关键论点 ， 用不同的角度或者论证方式充分去展开 。 效果一定比之前要好的多 。
示范：科学研究消耗太多时间和金钱?
原始版本：
Conducting scientific researches is in many cases not cost-efficient.This is mainly because most experiments require sophisticated technology and equipment.Also,the success rate is normally quite low,which means scientists need to repeat the same process several times.In addition,most findings cannot be discovered or put into practice in the short term.Finally,it is possible that with a large amount of investment,no result is found after years of experimentation.
上面有4个论点 ， 虽然都比较合理 ， 但是太多反而显得很乱 。 留学生作业网（www.cieae.net）建议大家可以试试缩减到一个点 ， 并围绕这一个点去充分展开 ， 大家看看效果如何：
改进版本：
Conducting scientific researches is in many cases not cost-efficient,not least because most experiments require sophisticated technology and equipment.For example,in space research,reliable facilities on the ground to send and receive signals accurately from the universe are needed,which could cost millions of dollars,and launching arocket for a one-way trip could even amount to more than one billion dollars.Nevertheless,seldom have we seen any direct application of the discovery of the space exploration at the moment.
记住 ， 写议论文 ， 展现论证能力 ， 比想到很丰富的细碎的小点更加重要 。
2.丰富论证内容
常见的论证方法有：解释原因、推导结果、举例子和做对比 。
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